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10. Instead of under/near Vineyard Ave why not say along Vineyard Aver The line crosses under Vineyard Avenue and is otherwise in the vicinity of Vineyard Avenue. It does not run along the avenue. Transmission and Distribution of Natural Gas" 11. In the first sentence, is a comma needed before ands According to the Elements of Style by Strunk and White, "in a series of three or more terms with a single conjunction, use a comma after each term. Thus write, red, white, and blue ..." This is the rule staff has used throughout the General Plan. Local Power Sources: 12. Should sentence two say something like, "Common uses" as a heating system is a use and I guess so is a photovoltaic system. Neither seems to be a "form". Staff suggests rewriting the second sentence of this section as follows: "Common €suses of solar energy axe solar water heating systems .. . 13. I am not sure we want to say "a couple of solar water systems....". We might want to say, "Solar water systems have been installed yearly typically to heat swimming pools etc." Staff suggests rewriting the fourth sentence of this section as follows: "~4cerq~le-efsSolar water heating systems are installed each year in Pleasanton, typically to heat pools" 14. Have we mentioned our partnership with Livermore on the solar project plan development No. Staff suggests adding the following to the Green Building Section after the second paragraph: "Pleasanton has continued fine-tuning its green building~xogram and is currently working on a Solar Cities Program, jointly with the City of Livermore, that will consider additional green- building practices. This program will consider standardized solar-energy-system-installation designs for residences and potentially for businesses By standardizing designs within a larger geographic area both cities expect economies of scale that might encourage more future een building implementation." 15. How about mentioning our award winning fire stationi! The third paragraph in the Green Building Section mentions Fire Station 4. The following changes could be made to this paragraph: "Fire Station 4. which opened in 2005. is the only fire station in the United States to achieve a LEED' "' Gold Certification. It incorporates many green-building ideas including a photovoltaic system that produces electrical energy. recycled and sustainable building materials and landscaping that creates a more environmentally friendly system fox managing rainwater "Green building is indicative of Pleasanton's efforts to plan for sustainability so that many generations can enjoy a high quality of life. See the Green Building section of the Community Character Element as well as the Sustainable Development and Planning section of the Air Quality Element for further discussion of green building." McGovern's QBA, Energy ElemenT 3 5/25/2007